Scene one: Sarah is walking home from her first day of school, getting ready to encounter her mom who will ask how her day was. Sarah before steeping into the house takes a deep sigh then opens the door.
Scene two: She walks up to her room slowly and quietly, mostly trying to avoid her mother and siblings. Soon enough as sarah is putting her book bag down her mother opens her bedroom door and begins asking how her school day was. sarah replies and tells her that it was alright nothing new than what shes use to, except theres an animating contest and the final product is due tomorrow. Sarahs mom asks if she is going to try and enter something in? Sarah says yes but she hasnt gotten any ideas yet. Her mom says alright honey and leaves the room.
Scene three: Sarah begins wandering about her room, sketching an assortment of things trying to come up with the perfect character. This scene is a little agonizing for Sarah because she cant quite figure out where she wants to go with her animation. She looks out the window every hour still mindless of what she wants to do and before she knows it, its dark outside.(the sky going from light to dark over a period of a day)
Scene four: Sarah finally draws up a character she likes and puts the name Malcolm under it, and circles him. Before going any father she puts her pen down and walks out her room to grab a cup of coffe.
Scene five: Sarah goes downstairs and gets a glass of coffe.
Scene six: When sarah gets back to into her room she notices that her notebook isnt the way she left it, she left it open with her pen on top, but when she returns her pen is nowhere to be found and the notebook is closed. Sarah gives a strong look of confusion and wanders over to her notebook. As she flips to the page that she had just drawn Malcolm, he is no longer on it. The surrounding setting of where he was at is still there but the character is gone and there are little footprints trailing off the page. She flips the page again and theres still little animated foot prints. She flips some more and jumps back for Malcom says to her "HEY THERE."
Sarah startled as can be replied with hello? and then gives herself a little tap across the face wondering if it was all a dream. Malcolm answers her thought and replies "no this is no dream my friend, im here to stop you from entering a disaster into your school art show. You want to win the prize right?" Sarah looks around her room to make sure no one will see her talking to a piece of paper and replies "Are you sure im not dreaming?" Malcolm ensures her that this is no dream and begins walking across the paper back in forth. He begins showing her what it takes to win this art show, by having her flip the next page. She asks him where her pen is, because shes had it ever since she was a little girl. He replies "your pen is no longer here, i am your pen now" sarah replies "No that cant be, i've had that pen as long as i can remember" he ensures her that she will not find a pen anywhere in her house, for he has taken all of them and that if she wants to win this art show and actually become someone at her school, she must quit wondering where her pen is and listen up. he tells sarah that he wants her to go to sleep and rest up for her big showing tomorrow, and to leave everything to him. Sarah already tired, passes out.
Scene seven: She wakes up the next morning and flips open her notebook, it is filled with artwork that is completely different than what she had expected. Malcolm asks her "Are you ready for your big day?" she replies "will seeing as i have no other choice, sure." Sarah puts her notebook and all her school supplies into her book bag and begins her walk to school. When sarah gets there, she drops her notebook into art show submission box and walks away...
Mary, I wrote this yesterday but it didn't save. Sorry if I'm brief.
ReplyDeleteWhen you say she is "getting ready to encounter her mom who will ask how her day was" I wonder 1. how you will SHOW this, and 2. why she is so anxious about talking to her mom? I think it builds to her character, but it needs to be clearer. It shows a social anxiety, or a desire to be left alone, or a lack of confidence on her part. Develop this.
I understand what you mean when you say "This scene is a little agonizing for Sarah because she cant quite figure out where she wants to go with her animation" but again, I don't know how you will SHOW it. Create a sequence of events.
I love the idea. It is a classic writer's block story... the interesting part is that her creation is the creative one, and she has to decide if she should turn in "his" work as her own. That's the dilemma, and you should emphasize it even more.
i think to show sarahs social anxiety i will show her as half a person when she is outside the walls of her comfort zone (home.)When shes having a conversastion about the show at school i will just over lay the conversastion i record and then when she walks home and comes inside is when you actually see her. the meaning behind it is that outside of school she feels uncomfortable, like no one really likes her and shes just another voice upon others. but when she gets inside she feels loved and cared for and feels as though shes actually a person thats recognized. When sarah leaves home to turn in her final work i was thinking to get scenes as half again (hips and down) to show her lack of accomplishment turning in "someone" elses work....plus i really didnt want to be the actress in this, but i think its my only option.
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